[LaSirene]

AGH! NUOOOO! MY EYES! WHAT IS SEEN CANNOT BE UNSEEN!

Joking! The 'far far away' part was cliched. How about, 'In a distant time and a far more distant place', or 'In a land unknown by many' or 'In a place and time forgotten by all but the lorekeepers'.

Lovely, but you could have had a little help with the writing.

I would have done, perhaps.

"Once upon a time
In a land now lost in the mists of legend...
lived a shadow of a man
A shell of man, lonely and lost...
Forgotten by his loved ones
Whom he had vowed to protect
He alone remembered his past
To everyone else, he was an ephemeral shadow
Secretly feared and rarely pitied
But then one day
His old and wizened master beckoned
Against all hope, he wasn't sent to die
But rather to find the fabled 'Breath of Life'
The shadow did not understand the purpose of such a task
and felt betrayed and enraged
That very night he set forth
Through the cold and dark night
and made it to his first destination a short time later
'Verdugo's Secret'
After several arduous days
he realized no one there could aide him.
Recalling an old legend of ghosts and undead...
he set off to The Mount of Lost Souls
Where he hoped to find the answers he so desperately sought
Though the journey was dangerous and trying
he sped towards a nameless village
It required all of his skill and knowledge to make his way
In the end
Accompanied by ominous clouds and thunder
he arrived unscathed (Even though it was dangerous?)
By speaking with a foreign elder, he learned little
The Elder had never heard of the artifact
known as "Breath of Life'
A faint memory, had he
of a woman who worked with curious scrolls
So the shadow traveled on to Elysium, the heart of the Elyos nation
However, his chances of finding one woman such a vast city were negligible.
After countless days of fruitless wandering...
only a flight stood between him and the city.
And standing before the might of the Elyos capital
even the shadow had to admit he felt pride for his people's achievements.
As much as he despised his own existence...
...for one brief moment...
...he was free.
Passing the gates of the Elysian devotional...
....for a few moments he forgot his past.
Now, with renewed vigor he went looking for someone who would know the woman he sought.
Maybe a saint or cleric.
Alas, his tremulous hopes and thoughts...
...were shattered in just one breath.
Elysium, impressive in it's grandeur it may be, was enormous!
Countless streets and alleys crossed into an intermingled mess...
...any of which could lead him to the woman.
"Where...", he asked the wind
"..shall I start?"
TO BE CONTINUED.


At least, that's how I would have done it.
If you like how I write and you want some help smoothing out the language in the second one let me know!